Don’t Be Scared to Change Your Story

I decided to re-write the first chapter of Sacrifice because it’s the only section of the book I’ve been unhappy with. I always grimace when I have to provide that section for queries. Every time I submit to an agent I catch myself saying, “Ugh this isn’t the best part.” Well why isn’t it? Why would I keep an opener that isn’t strong enough to be a good selling point? If i’m not fully happy with the first chapter, why would I expect an agent to enjoy it?

Trust your instincts and don’t be stubborn with your drafts.

If something feels wrong or weak, you can always get another opinion or test a different scenario out.

Ask yourself questions. How could this part be more interesting? What is the weakest part? Is it the dialogue? Are the first few lines not catchy enough?

For Sacrifice, I asked myself what I thought was weak about the first chapter. I asked myself what parts worked and what parts weren’t helping the flow of the story. I came to the conclusion that I had all the information I needed to convey, but I needed to change my execution. I brainstormed different ways I could change the first chapter to better introduce my character. I decided to keep important dialogue bits, but i’m completely changing the setting. Instead of a boring phone conversation, my main character will be on the job and battling a supernatural creature. I’m currently testing different creatures and settings for this particular supernatural encounter.

So remember, don’t be scared to go back and make further revisions to your story. If something isn’t working, it’s best to improve the areas before making the plunge into queries. Sometimes I think we mentally tell ourselves the manuscript is done because we want the story to be finished, but not always when it’s actually a polished final draft. I wish I had thought to fix my “final draft” sooner. Lesson learned. (;

Sacrifice Novel Kickstarter is Live!

The Sacrifice novel Kickstarter is now live! Even if you can’t donate right now, I would be forever grateful if you could share with friends and family. Don’t just share the link, but tell them WHY they should click it. This is my attempt to bring more diversity to literature. I just recently finished an author interview where I discussed the importance of diversity in literature, so i’ll link to that blog here once it’s published. If you have a blog or site that you would like to use to help spread the word, I have an official press release that I can send you!
 

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Click here to view the campaign, and please let me tell you why Sacrifice is important.

 

Sacrifice Novel Excerpt

There’s only a week left until the Kickstarter campaign launches, and i’m eager to share more information about my upcoming novel. Instead of sharing another piece of concept art or character bio, I decided to include a teaser from the Sacrifice manuscript. Did you miss my formal announcement? If so, you can click here to find out about the importance of my campaign and diversity in literature.

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Here’s an unedited excerpt from chapter eleven of the Sacrifice manuscript. I hope you enjoy this little taste of Sacrifice.

The sunset painted the concrete around me with a gorgeous orange highlight. I had no idea where I was or how I got here, but I stood on a city sidewalk in some dystopian wasteland. Collapsed and broken buildings littered the streets as vegetation crept up around the ruins. My eyes scanned the rusted yellow cars left abandoned in the street. Where were their owners? What had happened here?

Regardless of the city’s obvious decimation, I found the silence of this vast area to be quite eerie. Where were the birds and other signs of wildlife? This place had to be home to more than just plant life. I listened for several moments, but there was no sound to be heard.

Warm air still lingered from the departing sun, and I walked out toward the crumbled patch of concrete in front of me where I faced a lone parking meter. The meter seemed oddly placed even though it obviously wasn’t, but everything else I could see was deconstructed. I felt overwhelmed with an urge to reach out and touch the last surviving meter, but a cold draft of air stopped my hand before my fingers reached the metal post. Chill bumps paraded all over my body, and an icy breath tickled at my neck. I spun around on my heels, but there was no one to be seen.

I glanced back and found Micah next to the parking meter—my body jolted at his unexpected presence. My hand went to my chest as if to calm the beating of my heart, but I was even more relieved than startled.

“I’m so glad you’re here. Where ever here is. I’ve worried about you.”

“Sorry for scaring you,” he said in a soft voice. “I suck at this whole ghost thing.”

Micah’s pale grey eyes locked on with mine, but his expression was unreadable. He stepped off the sidewalk, and his eyes shifted to an enormous crater formed in the pavement nearby that was shaped like a monstrous footprint. I shuddered at the thought of what might have created such a print.

“I always wanted to visit here someday, but this is definitely not what I had in mind,” he said with a sigh.

“And where exactly is here?”

“Times Square.”

“This is New York City?” I gasped. I’d been to the city that never sleeps a few times, but never seen the place look anything shy of fabulous. Times Square made sense because the ground was littered with shattered pieces of what I recognized to be L.E.D lights, which were often used for the city’s signature lighting and billboards. The beautifully lit part of the city was always such a spectacular site, and now the entire area was growing dark as the sun continued to set.

“I always wanted to go to a Yankee’s game. Come back as a ghost and I’m still out of luck,” he said. His lips curled up slightly to match the mood of his joke, but the effect was lost with such weary eyes.

I opened my mouth to speak, but I didn’t know what to say. I felt a pull at my chest that was all too familiar. It pained me that he was gone, and we never got that baseball game he wanted.

As if he knew my thoughts had wandered to a sorrowful place, he tilted his gaze to the faded orange sky. “We need to leave here before the sun fully sets.”

“Why? What will happen at nighttime? Ghosts should be nocturnal, right?”

“I can see fine, but we won’t want to see what becomes of this place at full darkness.”

“What happens here?”

“This is the same outcome that happens everywhere if you don’t stop them. Every nasty supernatural being will be unleashed on our world if you don’t. The demons won’t come out during daylight so that keeps them at bay, but once they’re in total darkness they will come out to play.”

“Who causes this? When does this happen?”

“I tried to tell you last time, but they wouldn’t let me. The things they did, God Kat, I didn’t know it was possible to torture a ghost,” he said with a grimace. His eyes weren’t tired now, they looked troubled. A ghost with such haunted eyes just reeked of irony.

“Please Kat you have to figure this out. This isn’t just some random dream. I’m showing you the future. They know you’re the threat and they’ll be coming for you.”

Micah’s last words faded to a whisper as the sun disappeared, and the broken Times Square horizon filled with glowing eyes of inhuman color. I was suddenly engulfed in the darkness as I shouted for him.

 

From the Book: Sacrifice by S.E. Doster Copyright © 2014 by S.E. Doster. Artwork by Cindy Chan.

Enter the World of Sacrifice

Today I wanted to update you on the progress of the Sacrifice novel Kickstarter. I know last week was missing a character reveal, and I apologize for not delivering that as planned. I am still not quite satisfied with my concept art for the next character. I’ll spend the evening trying to tweak the digital portrait a bit so I can try to reveal that later this week. Did you miss my recent announcement about the Kickstarter? Don’t know what i’m talking about? Click here and let me tell you why this project is important.

Several people are asking when the Kickstarter will launch, and i’m glad so many people are anticipating the campaign! I’m currently on schedule for a September launch with either the 2nd or the 3rd as my launch date. I have a friend helping with my video for the campaign, and I am blown away by how amazing the intro looks! I can’t wait to share this with you!

Here are some random pieces of concept art that I created to show one of the books settings, as well as showcase the werewolves and mages from Sacrifice. Disclaimer: I am a digital art noob.

 

Part of Sacrifice takes place in NY's Catskill Mountains.

Part of Sacrifice takes place in NY’s Catskill Mountains.

Werewolves and mage from Sacrifice.

Werewolves and mage from Sacrifice.

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Meet the Ghost of Sacrifice

 

This week’s Sacrifice character reveal is Micah Morgan.

Micah had been Kat’s best friend for as long as she could remember, but he died in a tragic car accident almost four years ago. She struggled with the loss, and his name went unspoken—until he started haunting her dreams. Micah’s spirit became linked with a group of mages, and he communicates with Kat through her dreams to warn what the future holds if she can’t stop the supernatural attacks happening across the country.

 

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